Thanks, Thomas, I agree with you on the rhythm and reading fluidity. More and more, I find poets who use no punctuation at all, and some confess to me, they have difficulties with it. Therefore, I need to help, but some justify it with the intention of letting the readers to interpret and read the poem as they feel.
As an editor, I don’t have a lot of time to devote to them with lengthy explanations. I think I’ll save your story link and, if needed, I’ll put it in my notes for them to read and get inspired.
Thank you for sharing this article, which I find very useful as well as inspiring and insightful. By the way, you did great at simplify and cutting your verses.